Clever Insert Idea for Ai-Kon

I think I invented a cool thing! _{I havent seen it before anyways}
I was assigned to make an grey-scale add insert for a 5"x8" page in the Guidebook.
I was flipping through old guidebooks and none of the adds really stood out for me at all.. The only thing that I stopped to look at were pictures/comics.

So I built a manga page!

I made it in ONE day! I didnt know when it was due so I ended up only having a day, holy stress!

There is no story! I would like ideas if anyone can give me any for a page story arc that covers the same topics.

<sub>I basically flipped through some of my favorite mangas and how-twos for pose reference and layout ideas (I know that is poor form but this is my very first try at a page ever)

I drew this up in fireworks! Fireworks sucks but I don't know what program to learn for this sort of thing

I made the resolution of this to appear as it would IN SCALE the actual image is like 300 dpi.</sub>

I'll sign anyone's guidebook at if they want!!
_{I didn't have any drawings up on DA yet so this makes me feel super awkward and vulnerable! but I want feedback on how to make this idea better and make a tradition of it}